Evergreen & Stylistic Options Discussed

So as I was reading the article "Evergreen" it felt like reading everything I was ever taught in middle school and high school. It is exactly how I was taught how to write and pretty much all I have ever done. I find it ionic that we are reading this considering that we were asked to step away from it for our last paper. I fel confussed but at ease to see the style I have always used is very well organized and useful. It is how I understand best and like to write.

On the other hand the article "Stylistic Options" was different from anything I have read before. It broke down paragraphs in a very intersting way that I never thought about before. After reading it a couple times it really made sense and I liked seeing how sentences can really relate because I feel like I learned how to eliminate unuseful information and how to organize a paragragh better. I however had trouble with the example we were supposed to analysed and I think I got the steps mixed up. I think I need to look more into the steps and maybe hear someone else explain it so I can break down my paragraphs better.

Dorothea Lange's "Migrant Mother"

In this article the author proposes different views over the 6 very powerful pictures Dorothea Lange took of a woman and her three children during the depression of 1920.

She gives several different views about her motives for taking the pictures and justifications for doing so. Some of her examples(people) wrote about how they think she had the people pose every picture and it was all fixed up and fake. While others argued the sincerity and genuine motives she had.

In my opinion she took the pictures to inform the outside world of what the real situation was during the depression. To keep these pictures alive for generations to come. To learn from mistakes and not repeat them in the future. To be greatful for what we have and dont ever doubt it could all disapear in a second. I think her pictures are very powerless, yet at the same time they are art and everyone will interpret them and view them differently. There is no right or wrong answer once pictures go public. The author must deal with the critisicm.

The pictures were very touching and sent weird feelings down my spine directly into my soul. I had seen the main picture before many years ago and have always been affected by it the same way.

The World of Blogs by Ana Banos (Outline)

I think my in class essay was very simple and easy to understand and follow. The outline breaks it down better.

Introduction:
Explains my first experiences as a blogger and finding the new world of blogs.Goes through my thoughts and struggles. Explains my feelings on it in very different ways. It shows a change in my opinion.

First Body Paragraph:
Explains the key factors for one to communicate effectively through a blog. Gives many characteristics and a strong example. Very detailed.

Second Body Paragraph:
Explains what comments do for a blog and how to distinguish the good from the bad. Goes into details and gives examples.

Conclusion:
Wraps up paper. Wraps up my feelings and emotions and further explains my experience with researching blogs for this paper.


Tentative New Outline:

Beging with a more eye catching sentence. Grab the readers attention better. Make stronger statements. Divide up the paragraphs. Have more different ideas and topics separated. Have a more lasting impression.

I am having trouble stepping out of the box and criticicing my own mistakes because it is always easier to be told by someone else what is wrong with one's paper than having to find it on your own. I am struggling but will continue to try. :)